the idea is great
I really dig the structure and the melodies you've got going on here.
One thing that I would recommend though, that would help your track out alot here, would be some different drum samples. The kick is decent, but the snare sounds very Floops lol
and that synth that comes in at 1:00 seems to be almost in a world of it's own, just dropping by to say " whats up" put a very very tiny bit of verb on it, and lower the volume a tad :D
Other than that i'm digging it and look forward to more submissions of yours :D
If you're willing to take the time, I've got a new track up myself called beats and broadswords. A review would be much appreciated :D